When I was a junior high school student, I once took part in a relay race at my school’s athletic meet. I really wanted to win the championship so I took the race very seriously. I not only practiced hard but asked my classmates to do their best. Once I didn’t satisfy with their performance, I would scold them strictly during our practice. Finally, the athletic meet day came and soon the relay race began. At first, our team ran very well and was in the lead. When it was my turn, I also ran very fast; however, when I was close to the next runner, I suddenly slipped. My mistake made our team lose the competition and I felt extremely embarrassed when I saw my classmates’ depressed expression.
once我覺得改成as long as會比較好!!
回覆刪除感覺好像還沒結束~後面看到隊友的表情，是不是要說點話或做點什麼事呢?
回覆刪除沒有結論的感覺怪怪的..
回覆刪除Once I didn’t satisfy with...
回覆刪除應該是＂wasn't satisfied with＂吧。
然後同上，加個結論★
沒有結論句~~~
回覆刪除I didn’t satisfy with their performance
怪怪的 應該是wasn't satisfied with
Once I didn’t satisfy with their performance
回覆刪除裡的didn't satisfy 應該是wasn't satisfied
??
所以結論是....?
I didn’t satisfy with their performance
回覆刪除應該是wasn't satisfied with
原本是領先的
為什麼到你的時候就有別人在你的前面
這裡可以再多加描述一些
不然覺得怪怪的
再加個結論吧!
=ˇ=
恩恩感覺真的很尷尬!
回覆刪除覺得要加點結論耶^^
1.Once I didn’t satisfy with their performance, I would scold them strictly during our practice.
回覆刪除→As long as I wasn't satisfied with their performance, I would scold them strictly during our practice.
2.My mistake made our team lose the competition and I felt extremely embarrassed when I saw my classmates’ depressed expression.
→My mistake made our team lose the competition and I felt extremely embarrassed when I saw my classmates’ depressing expression.
感覺缺了結論句，加一下比較好哦…!
(以上，淺見…)
沒有結論句感覺好像還沒結束。
回覆刪除品婷不要傷心