2011年9月6日 星期二
family background
My name is Pin-Ting Chen. I was born and raised in an ordinary family. There are five members in my family. My father operates a printing factory, he works hard around the clock to support my family. My mother is a secretary in a trade company. My two sisters are both students. My parents teach us to be diligent and honest, moreover, they want us to plan our life thoroughly because they consider that we should be responsible for ourselves. Both of my parents are righteous and they influence me in many aspects. I am grateful for my family very much.
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My father operates a printing factory, he works hard around the clock ...
回覆刪除我覺得逗號應該改成分號。
My parents teach us to be diligent and honest, moreover, they want us to plan...
應該是＂; moreover,＂。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
1.My father operates a printing factory, he works hard around the clock to support my family.
回覆刪除→要加連接詞。
2.My parents teach us to be diligent and honest, moreover, they want...
→moreover前面要改成分號。
﹡大部分都是單句，建議可以用一些連貫副詞。
(以上，淺見。)
My parents teach us to be diligent and honest", moreover," they want us to plan our life
回覆刪除前面應該用分號
My parents teach us to be diligent and honest, moreover, they want us
回覆刪除moreover前應該是分號唷!!